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Solid world building, weak on story progression

Review from Wrath →

Too much time is spent on explaining a overcomplicated world system and progression. To counterbalance this tediousness, character progression beyond the main character is extremely limited. The threats to the main character go from zero to one hundred, and do not match the main character’s progression, ability, or reasoning capabilities….so Deus Ex Machina is the..

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spot on narration.

Review from Industrial Strength Magic →

Macronomicon cam always be counted on for building a busted character build that someday topples reality with insanely overpowered abilities. this story does not fail to deliver on that streak.Perry is the oblivious main character who comes into a set of abilities courtesy of his parents disagreement over his proper path in life; causing him..

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just fabulous

Review from Dead Tired II →

it’s funny. it has great characters. the world is well built. the story is well told. the words word well 🙂 this story makes me happy kept me entertained. I strongly suspect there is more under the surface, (there definitely is) but it is never approached in a way to break you out of the..

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