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This book felt very amateurish, both writing ,plot and narration. If you’d like a tightly written intelligent book this one would not be for you you

Too much Deus ex Machina. Unrealistic characters whose skill development more closely mirrored a Dungeons & Dragons game than the months of training that would realistically be required. Unnecessarily dramatic romantic scenes. The lieutenant consistently made stupid tactical decisions in spite of good information. The narrator’s pauses and breaks fell in unnatural positions giving the..

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The storyline is good . I did return this book without finishing it . I found it too wordy , every detail ,every action and too much of what the characters say is explained . I don’t know how old this author is but the writing passes for a high school student .

Everything has to be explained to a person who has gaming knowledge. Bad people lie and do bad things and look bad people lie and do even worse things WOW how could they do this to me/us they’re not nice THIS SUCKS BECAUSE STUPIDITY AND IGNORANCE ARE NOT GOOD PLOTS

This book will get your hopes up for a good series. If you read them all you will be disappointed. Better not even to start. The books just go downhill from here. What a waste of a good premise.

boring and predictable characters. I struggled through chapter 9. then just gave up. Don’t bother.

I though over all this was a good story with potential… i would have liked better character development … some sometimes i felt it seems stilted. This could be in part to the narration. I might get the second book but hesitate because of the narration… there’s a difference in just reading the book as..

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erased it off my phone after 3rd book slow,boring,reads like a children’s book. have it a chance but couldn’t finish it.

just like my post it was lacking details! i love sharks!i love books about sharks. but with true shark behavior. this book took way to many liberties with Sharks backing up, doing life support damage like he knows. i give it a 3. narrator needs work.

Book is written as in first grade, narration is spoken like an 8th grader. I made it to chapter 10 and you still have no plot movement. Just awful.