N.R., there are chords struck in this that are way too familiar with what is going on in society today with AI, and I truly think you have come up with a story of quality here. It took me a minute to get into it because of Joel’s “edgy breathy drama” stuff, but I kept in there and it was worth hanging in. Brings a lot of thought to what could be in the future.
Joel, back off on breathy drama. Quit making everything sentence feel like it’s the end of the world. The story can be good without making it sound “desparate” all the time. Your voice for the AI was good – Depth, precision, character. But the rest, back off on the breathy drama. It takes away from the story.
Listener, This will surprise you. And make you think. It’s good…worth the listen.