Choosing Riley’s personality to be a blonde bimbo ruined this book. She is very cartoony and by chapter 9-10 all of the jokes get very old. Its usually Riley shouting random profanities, usually Ass or Shit is involved, then she makes some very unintelligent remark that just makes me cringe. It wouldn’t be so bad, but in contradicts with the personalities of the other characters and the situation she is in. She is in a life or death, situation and she is just shouting her big mouth off and spraying people with pepper spray. The big dumb jock guys take it and spot random remarks about her ass and breasts.
Overall it feels more like some Highschool Manga over a serious attempt at a book.