Where to start? The MC is a non-person, the rest of the cast is flat and uninteresting. Personal progression is written using the formula “ I didn’t use to dare or be able to, but now i know the MC, and now i am all better”.
The writer feels a need to write out the characters thoughts and inner dialog, that is often so painfully obvious that it makes me feel like the writer is speaking Down to me.
The story revolves around the MC getting a single bright idea and capitalizing on it for 12 hours, to defeat a jerk. But with the interesting, characterbuilding stuff cut away through time-jumps.
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