Too much Deus ex Machina. Unrealistic characters whose skill development more closely mirrored a Dungeons & Dragons game than the months of training that would realistically be required. Unnecessarily dramatic romantic scenes. The lieutenant consistently made stupid tactical decisions in spite of good information.
The narrator’s pauses and breaks fell in unnatural positions giving the presentation a disjuncted feeling. This also set my teeth on edge on edge making it painful to listen to And difficult to get immersed.