Narrator: 3 stars
Story: 5 stars
Writing: 5 stars
The narrator had a hard time keeping an even pace. Most of the time, it felt deliberate, as if she thought slowing things down or speeding them up would bring out certain parts. I grew quickly frustrated with it. She did well with accents and emotions and character personalities though. Just needs to work on that pace issue and remembering accents (aside from dialogue, everything was in American accent but she seemed to forget that at times.) The story was fun! It swapped characters often, but I never felt lost. I almost wish it was longer. Every character was vastly different from one another. The writing was excellent. I saw no flaws here as everything flowed seamlessly from one sentence to the next.