A story should contain love, violence, SEX (you write like you’re a schoolboy virgin), real relationships. This part of the story is a joke. The timeline is great, the concepts are fantastic and the story is almost great. All this killing going on and people get embarrassed holding hands or kissing? That is ridiculous. Ignorant. People at war facing death have more physical contact and passionate intimacy. Get over your sex bias. Complete the characters.
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