The story premise seems like it had a good direction but it was never developed. By the 6th chapter there had been almost 2 entire chapters dedicated to overly detailed sex scenes. Im not a prude by any means but almost a half hour description of sex with most every female character is more than a little much. Call it a harem novel if thats what you want to write but be honest about it. This is the story form of a fantasy themed porno with the same level of story development.