I enjoyed parts of this story, the world created and the concept. But this story left me wanting more. I occasionally was confused when it suddenly switched locations in the middle of high action – which was probably Intentional but took me a moment to figure out where we were. Parts of the story where the plot is rotated 180 seems weakly built though still okay. I got tired of the constant sexual banter as it was a bit much. This story has a lot of potential. I agree with another perhaps a different author and some story tweak
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