It’s a good book. Liked the story.
But what’s with the vocab? It’s like they tried to pick the least used words in the dictionary.
I’m not sure why I need to know when someone had a damaged coxis or when they start pulling rancor instead of agro. (why did they stop using agro?)
Instead of bifurcated why not just say it split.
It creates weird and confusing moments in the book like when a hero has a queer moment (something strange happened) or when a heroine is caught playing with her thong. (a small leather strap for a cape.)
And why ROYGBIV goats?
Not multicolor, not rainbow, but actually writing ROY-G-BIV.
Synonyms are great, maybe just don’t go off the deep end.