Enjoyed the story so far. Phil is doing a good job as narrator but can use a little bit more variety in his characters voices. One major problem that the story has is the communication between Void and his followers. Write it down. Void for a volume and a half now can read and write. It’s absurd that no one, especially Void, hasn’t thought to write down what Void has to say. B has known Void can read since it learned in the library half way through volume 1. Yet not once has she thought to have it write what it has to say. It was funny at first but now it’s just sad. As a writer, it’s worth sacrificing the occasional “funny” misunderstanding to avoid making your characters look like idiots. It’s especially bad when you realize that a considerable chunk of this story has people reading things in ordered to survive. This volume particularly had a section that focused on people learning how read and write. B this volume took the time to chronicle her life after meeting Void. Yet not once after all that writing did she think to have Void write anything down? It didn’t hit her brain once while spending days writing about her experience with Void to have her master write things down as the solution to her comprehension problem with it? So to see the character’s, especially B who we know can read, struggle to get the true message from their god when it’s a pen and paper away was annoying every time for me.
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