Lots of sex that has no value to the story. Also the authors pacing is erratic and irrational jumping around constantly. The story would have benefited greatly from an editor reading it and encouraging a more coherent flow. It felt like the authors only concern was what he wanted to write. He couldn’t be bothered with making a strongly woven story for the reader. This felt like hobby writing for personal pleasure, not professional writing for the enjoyment of the audience.
