I wish the author had sent his story to a writer that could have helped him turn it into a masterpiece. The entire thing is short blunt sentences like it’s meant for a kindergartner. There’s no adjectives or metaphors or ANYTHING that appeals to the senses and draws you in like a good author does. Just robotic repetitive sentences. “He said this. He did that. Then he said this.” I really wanted to suffer through the writing just for the story but I couldn’t do it which is too bad because I was really looking forward to it. If this author had teamed up with an experienced writer I think he could have blown it out of the water.
The speaker was great & this isn’t a reflection of him.