I’m on chapter 12 of about 20, the mc has no redeeming values. Between his self loathing, acting like a bully even though he thinks he’s cheating. Worse is how he acts, when he beats someone through actually cheating. Then a diety decides to give him power/insight that he does not deserve. This only happens because the writer decided it should.
The Narrator needs a throat lozenge. Things come across as monotone, raspy and I’m confused that the character being portrayed is old, matronly or possibly a younger woman, only to realize it’s supposed to be a slightly older, at most 1 generation older man.
The story is telegraphed at times. Other times within a few sentences everything is contradictory. Both are with the narration being hard to follow.
I’m going to try and finish this and hopefully this gets better.