So, I started this story on a long drive. The male voice with a predominantly female amount of characters was… an interesting choice. The reader’s voice is… okay I suppose? There’s a cadence or… something about the inflection that’s off putting to me though. I can’t quite put my finger on it yet… too… announcer like? That’s not quite right but maybe it’ll come to me. The other main thing that prompted this review now before I even got far in was the need for an editor. MC and young girl have a convo about other possible character showing up. Next chapter or break occurs, said person shows up and it’s as if that previous conversation didn’t happen. Should have either cut the first conversation out, or just a little embellishment on the second instead of what it was. So early on it makes me wary of how much investment I’ll put into it. Still, the magic system, for what it is so far is interesting. Hopefully it picks up and smoothes out and keeps my interest better bit for so far it’s not bad.